Assignment#15- Final reflection

     Now that I had looked back at my first and seventh blogs I realized that I had improved my writing skills. I feel that I have achieved 50% in writing because when I compare my first paper to the last one there was a lot of difference in it. I felt that I have reached my goal in someway. I wanted to write essay in college level and choose the vocabulary which fits in there, I think I had done a good job in that. 

    My strengths are that I know how to write a main point and I know how to choose a college level vocabulary for essays. I would like to develop more on these strengths for further in writing. My weakness is that I still have trouble in writing a strong sentence for thesis or for a main idea of a story. I have been including some points in essays which are not necessary or I am not talking about it in later  in the essay. I still have to work on organizing the essay. Overall, I am satisfied that I had improved my writing in a way that I want. 

Assignment#14- Planning for revisions

 

     For my portfolio I chose to revise my literacy narrative essay. The strength of my paper is that I have well written the story. In the essay I have explained what are some conflicts during the writing process of an assignment and how I completed it. The weakness of my paper is that I gave too may details which I could write specific. In middle of the essay I could have included some information, but I didn't. 

   To be more perfect in the essay I will correct the weakness in my paper. I will work on including some information that was needed in the story. Also, there are some sentences which I have to reword them. There are minor mistakes of verbs and run-ons and those can be fixed as well. If I fix these mistakes I will have perfect essay. 

Assignment# 13: Analyzing and Writing Arguments



      I analyzed the aricle called "Don't Presume to Know a Pig's Mind". In that article the author has a strong argument. He started the article by explaining an commercial ad by Chipotle and argued what's wrong in that ad. Becuase of their ad the large buyer of bacon, McDonald's, took a strong decision which is not helpful to farmers. In that ad the author was supporting farmers and targeting Chipotle's commercial ad. He has done everthing well, but he should have explained how the pigs were treated in crowded building and why the farmers have to keep their pigs in buildings.This article taught me how I have to be careful in writing my argumantative essay. I have to give enough and clear information, so readers can be convinced and understand what I was trying to say. In my essay I have to stay more focused on my main thesis and be able to give the right amount of facts.

Assignment# 12: Thinking Critically About Evidence



     I was going argue about Should humans be vegetarian. I was going to argue that humans can live healthy with vegetables. I will explain how will vegetables helps us and what other foods that can help our immune system much better.

Logos:
     - Nutrition
     - Health

Pathos:
     - Obesity
     - Live longer
     - Less frequency to doctors
     - No dental issues
Ehtos
     - Religion
     - Spiritual

•  My strongest point is that I will provide all vegetable names or some rear vegetables no one heard about before and how they will help us. I will explain what is the use for example, control of obesity, have stronger immune system and etc. In my argument I'm going to prove that what do we need for our body to be healthy and how vegetables will function our body.
• My weakest point is that I will write about Hindu religion. I will explain why don't they eat meat and what do they to be healthy. I said this is the weakest point becuase some people might disagree with this religion bussiness, but I'm going make it as a strong point in convincing how hindus are living without meat and healthy. And I will convince that they living longer and healthier.

Assignment# 11- Patterns of errors

•      In my writing, the first mistake that I was constantly making was not knowing when to use in and on in a sentence. These kind of mistakes change the meaning of the sentence. When I'm not clear on what I want to say, then readers will get confused about the story. I know that it is very important to clarify to readers without confuse them and I will loose some points on it. In my old essays I found those mistakes invariable.  
•   The second mistake was thesis statement. In each of my essay I didn't have a strong thesis statement, yet it is acceptable. Thesis is the important base of the story and if  I couldn't convince the reader with my main idea, then the essay wouldn't worth full points. I know it is important to have thesis, but I always struggle on working with the thesis statement each time that I work on my essay.
• The final mistake was my conclusion. I habitually writing the conclusion very unfocused or it was not well restated my essay. Sometimes the conclusion seems unfinished which makes it unnecessary story. In essays it is very important to have introduction, thesis, body, and conclusion. I believe that it is very important to have these four things has to be clear for readers. I know that I still need to work on these in my current essays and 'till now I have been facing these problems in my essays.     

Assignmaent# 10- Thinking critically about Peer Review

     Peer Review is very helpful process in wrting assingments. So far in class we tried different peer reviews in class, but I think it should be improved. It should be improved by 2 people working on one paper. What I mean is that there should be only one writer and one reader, so they can focus on only one paper. Because I think it is very confusing or difficult to review two  papers at a time. I think we are not able to suggest better on both papers at time. My strength as peer reviewer is that I'm able to correct some mistakes or some suggestions that I want as a reader. My weakness is that I'm not able to concentrate on both papers at the same time. Also, when peer reveiw is done I'm not able to follow both suggestions from peers. One peer is suggesting is one thing and the other is suggesting the other. But when I compare it both peers have different ideas on the same concept and it seems like one is not agreeing with the other. I think peer review is helpful when the professor checks if the peers are suggesting the right thing for writer.  

Assignment# 9- A choice in topics

     I found the literacy narrative much easier to do because I can write about my experience in writing. First, I thought the literacy narrative essay is the harder assignment because I didn't know what is it and what to write about. After reading the assignment sheet and reading the stories in the book I kind of got it what to write. Then I wrote about my experience the experience in learning the two languages at the same time. Later I found out it's not the story to write about, so I changed my story later on. This time I wrote about my first experience in writing when I didn't know how to write a full sentence when I first came to Chicago. This is easy because I know what I'm going to say and I know what I want to write.

     The difficult assignment was ad analysis essay. I did explained very well about the ad and how it was displayed. I think I didn't analyzed the ad that much. It is kind of difficult because writing about the ad for someone who never saw that ad before. If the audience know what ad I'm writing about then it will be easy for them to understand what I'm saying. I did my best in that, still it is a difficult assignment.