Assignment# 7: Reflecting on Progress

     When I look back at my first blog assignment and compare it to today writing I found many mistakes in my first blog writing. I had missed some words between sentences and it's not clear what I'm talking about. I did improved a little bit in choosing word choices for college level. I feel that my writing still the same as before, I don't see any progress because when I checked all my writing I always miss some rule in writing. Since we don't learn grammar in this class I'm still struggling to write perfectly. I think when I see an example of writing for certain topics I might improve my writing. That's what I had done in my last three writing work shops. It helps me a lot when I see example of some essays. Peer review helps me a lot where find mistakes in my paper and how can I improve it in better way. I liked the peer review sessions and I enjoy learning something new each time when we have a session.  As I stated before, in class there should be examples of writings when we are assigned a writing topic. I think it gives an how a paper should look like. Now I can revise my own paper and I do find mistakes when I revise, but I'm not totally perfect in it. No, I don't think my writing as improved and I know it takes time to learn, but I'm not satisfied with my writing so far. 

Assignment# 6- Rhetorical Situations

Purpose: The purpose is different in both literacy narrative and ad analysis papers. In literacy 

              narrative, we write about experience in some situation and we can see the purpose

              based on the story. But, in ad analysis we write about the purpose of the ad which is 

              not our idea. We have be able to write what is the ad company is trying to tell us and 

              why have buy their product.

              The main similarity between these two papers is that we have to be able to explain why

              we are writing these papers.

Audience: There are two different types audience in both papers which is that in literacy narrative,

               we know who we are writing to and will know how much we need explain our story. 

               But, in ad analysis the audience will be who are trying the product and how they are

               convincing us to buy the product. We need be able to convince our audience if our

               audience never seen the ad before.

               The only similarity between these two papers is that we have to give certain amount of 

               details which can convince audience.

Genre: In literacy narrative, we write our personal experience which we choose to write. In ad

          analysis, we have to write the genre that they had in the ad. The writer doesn't have any 

          choice to pick a genre for this. 

Tone: We have a choice of tone when we write our paper. It can be serious, happy, sad, etc. 

         As I mentioned before there is no choice in choosing a tone for an ad analysis because we 

         have to be able to write the tone which is in the ad.

                                

• Purpose: Metro shoes are best for kids. The shoe makes kids happy and comfort for feet. This ad is arguing that their shoe is safe for kids and they will be able to play well and will have more fun. I can tell that by looking in to the kids face and how happy they are.
• Audience: Those kids age might be between 7-10. Kids are main target for this shoe company. Also, the feature of the shoe will defiantly attract kids. The text in this ad shows the will be happy to wear this shoe  "Happy Feet Make Happy People". 
• Genre: There are many other shoe advertisements which persuade audience to buy their product. Metro shoe ad did the same thing by showing their shoe feature which is very convincing for kids and parents.
• Tone: The boy and girl who are sliding from the shoes are very happy which show a happy tone.    

Revision

• I started my rough draft by jumping right in to the story. In peer review session I saw mistakes when my peers told me what I did wrong. As a reader they explained me want they want in my story. In my final draft I offered background information in introduction. Later on the story changed a little bit.
• I made a major revision by offering background information and I corrected fragments as well. This is a major revision of my paper because readers will know me much better and they will be able to see how hard it is for me to learn a new language and why I had difficulties to learn a language. This major change is very important in my story because this will give readers much better view of me. 
• After revising my paper I found mistakes which I need to correct for final draft. I found that I have problems with wordiness and fragments; on the other hand, I have problems with verb tense too. In final draft corrected those major mistakes.
• Peer review session helped me a lot and it gave me a chance to improve my writing. I was able to extend my paper in a better way. When I revise my own paper I usually don't find many mistakes in my paper. Even after revising sometimes what I wrote is right, but when someone else reads my paper they will find many mistakes what I was not able to see before. I think peer review is a best way to improve our writing. 
• My strongest aspect in my paper would be I explained very well what are some difficulties to learn a new language. My weakest point is that I think I gave too many details about it.