Revision

• I started my rough draft by jumping right in to the story. In peer review session I saw mistakes when my peers told me what I did wrong. As a reader they explained me want they want in my story. In my final draft I offered background information in introduction. Later on the story changed a little bit.
• I made a major revision by offering background information and I corrected fragments as well. This is a major revision of my paper because readers will know me much better and they will be able to see how hard it is for me to learn a new language and why I had difficulties to learn a language. This major change is very important in my story because this will give readers much better view of me. 
• After revising my paper I found mistakes which I need to correct for final draft. I found that I have problems with wordiness and fragments; on the other hand, I have problems with verb tense too. In final draft corrected those major mistakes.
• Peer review session helped me a lot and it gave me a chance to improve my writing. I was able to extend my paper in a better way. When I revise my own paper I usually don't find many mistakes in my paper. Even after revising sometimes what I wrote is right, but when someone else reads my paper they will find many mistakes what I was not able to see before. I think peer review is a best way to improve our writing. 
• My strongest aspect in my paper would be I explained very well what are some difficulties to learn a new language. My weakest point is that I think I gave too many details about it.